a couple comments
i love the simplicity...i see all too often someone ruining a good piece by making it overly complicated and too hard to follow...i do agree with Isarios in the sense that intense bass with accents at the climax would really give it that extra UMPH! that it needs to make it absolutely amazing...i prefer octaves on the strong tones (your root, 3rd and 5ths) tends to really give it a real climactic feel...also with the climax maybe something underlying the main 2 melodies...just some sort of moving countermelody with an 8th or 16th note rythym just to make it move and again give it that extra UMPH! overall a really great piece...o and i understand what its like takin a whole day to compose something...it once took me 6 months to compose a 3 movement piece that was about 11 minutes long...but the ones that you take your time with tend to be the best =D Good luck in your endevours!